我自己做完看上去好順, 如順水推舟,推論如一層層, 見解不算太獨到但有趣
發展要真係打篇文出來才講得, 我是一步步, 踏雪飛霜推上去,
我的原意是想指出, 沒有一個"最好的學習方法", 不過如果真是要選, 我會在小時選前耆, 大一點選後者
我的朋友大多傾向一面, 縱使文筆較我優, 在正反立論上我認為自己技勝一籌
嗯,呢個係整體既develop
但你係咪每段一個point,而果個point又用幾多行/幾多字去解釋??
如果多字解釋(約40-50一段)之餘係唔只hi到個point,更可以講闊少少的話就好啦
的確你係有做到正反立論,但如果想拎高分,對比要善用
我睇你1#果度似乎係64比例去做駁
我平時寫開都係主寫正面,係開頭或者最後先顧另外果面,大約82比例
我覺得咁寫就明確d同係正面既point有更大的發展空間
而你64就感覺全面d 同好多point咁
但對於個marking scheme 我就唔清楚~_~
又冇每個40~50字
一段 6行-8行, 我寫左2版半
我是如打太極, 連消帶打, 一個接著一個上, 一個比一個有趣,
加左一點"陶傑式"比喻, 前後算是連貫
不過因為我是兩面, 64比是必要的, 我那些朋友寫一面就73, 82我好少用
只要攤開我的論點 自動對比強烈, 我自己看也過癮
我前面那個電車男 第一句 "Hello , I am Jxxxx" 加 alternative lines 笑死我
你又知人地寫乜= =
本帖最後由 幻朧 於 10-5-2009 19:56 編輯
Task 2 topic 1
Brief idea:
Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly tal ...
小莓。改 發表於 9-5-2009 19:59 http://www.nakuz.com/bbs/images/common/back.gif
I am sorry that grown children are teenagers
so half of the essay may be out of topic
本帖最後由 [Ｋ] 於 10-5-2009 20:52 編輯
Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly talk about the definition of children : young and grown. They need different teaching method, due to different needs in different stage.
#3 - #5 : Talking about young children first, support teaching at home rather than send to school
#3 : In children' view e.g. Their needs, the things they need to learn, mind
#4 : In parents' view e.g. knowledge and time required, difficulties faced
#5 : Other advantages e.g. avoid facing unmoral teachers
#6 - #8 : Talking about grown children, support going to school
#6 : In children' view e.g freedom, auto. learn... , make contrast to #3
#7 : In parents' view make contrast to #4
#8 : Other advantages e.g. social manners ...
#9 To conclude no best method to teach but better to teach, parents should find out more method to help their children growth healthy
grown childeren = teenager + 1
This part is already not related to the question.
That means half of your composition is out of topic.
And also, you state your view on the 3rd paragraph.
I think it will be better if you did it on the last sentence of the first paragraph
This makes your view more clear for easier marking.
總係覺得,樓主果文個咁作會有問題
我都覺有Ｄ寫多左ＧＥ感覺。。
Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly talk about the definition of ch ...
[Ｋ] 發表於 10-5-2009 20:41 http://nakuz.com/bbs/images/common/back.gif
Really?
Grown children = teenager?
That depends on how I defined.