評文 : 這會有grade幾

小莓。改

我自己做完看上去好順, 如順水推舟,推論如一層層, 見解不算太獨到但有趣
發展要真係打篇文出來才講得, 我是一步步, 踏雪飛霜推上去,
我的原意是想指出, 沒有一個"最好的學習方法", 不過如果真是要選, 我會在小時選前耆, 大一點選後者

我的朋友大多傾向一面, 縱使文筆較我優, 在正反立論上我認為自己技勝一籌

[H]型仔東

嗯,呢個係整體既develop
但你係咪每段一個point,而果個point又用幾多行/幾多字去解釋??
如果多字解釋(約40-50一段)之餘係唔只hi到個point,更可以講闊少少的話就好啦

的確你係有做到正反立論,但如果想拎高分,對比要善用
我睇你1#果度似乎係64比例去做駁
我平時寫開都係主寫正面,係開頭或者最後先顧另外果面,大約82比例
我覺得咁寫就明確d同係正面既point有更大的發展空間
而你64就感覺全面d 同好多point咁
但對於個marking scheme 我就唔清楚~_~

小莓。改

又冇每個40~50字
一段 6行-8行, 我寫左2版半
我是如打太極, 連消帶打, 一個接著一個上, 一個比一個有趣,
加左一點"陶傑式"比喻, 前後算是連貫

不過因為我是兩面, 64比是必要的, 我那些朋友寫一面就73, 82我好少用
只要攤開我的論點 自動對比強烈, 我自己看也過癮

我前面那個電車男 第一句 "Hello , I am Jxxxx" 加 alternative lines 笑死我

[H]型仔東

你又知人地寫乜= =

幻朧

Task 2 topic 1

Brief idea:
Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly tal ...
小莓。改 發表於 9-5-2009 19:59

I am sorry that grown children are teenagers

so half of the essay may be out of topic

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Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly talk about the definition of children : young and grown. They need different teaching method, due to different needs in different stage.
#3 - #5 : Talking about young children first, support teaching at home rather than send to school
  #3 : In children' view e.g. Their needs, the things they need to learn, mind
  #4 : In parents' view e.g. knowledge and time required, difficulties faced
  #5 : Other advantages e.g. avoid facing unmoral teachers
#6 - #8 : Talking about grown children, support going to school
  #6 : In children' view e.g freedom, auto. learn... , make contrast to #3
  #7 : In parents' view make contrast to #4
  #8 : Other advantages e.g. social manners ...
#9 To conclude no best method to teach but better to teach, parents should find out more method to help their children growth healthy



grown childeren = teenager + 1

This part is already not related to the question.

That means half of your composition is out of topic.

And also, you state your view on the 3rd paragraph.

I think it will be better if you did it on the last sentence of the first paragraph

This makes your view more clear for easier marking.

Roy

總係覺得,樓主果文個咁作會有問題

girugamesh

我都覺有Ｄ寫多左ＧＥ感覺。。

小莓。改

Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly talk about the definition of ch ...
[Ｋ] 發表於 10-5-2009 20:41

Really?
Grown children = teenager?
That depends on how I defined.