評文 : 這會有grade幾
Task 2 topic 1Brief idea:
Dear Editor,
#1 : Introduction : The argument between stay at home and send to school is no use if children are not classified by their age and their needs
#2 : Briefly talk about the definition of children : young and grown. They need different teaching method, due to different needs in different stage.
#3 - #5 : Talking about young children first, support teaching at home rather than send to school
#3 : In children' view e.g. Their needs, the things they need to learn, mind
#4 : In parents' view e.g. knowledge and time required, difficulties faced
#5 : Other advantages e.g. avoid facing unmoral teachers
#6 - #8 : Talking about grown children, support going to school
#6 : In children' view e.g freedom, auto. learn... , make contrast to #3
#7 : In parents' view make contrast to #4
#8 : Other advantages e.g. social manners ...
#9 To conclude no best method to teach but better to teach, parents should find out more method to help their children growth healthy
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What's the grade? 睇文唔係要睇埋D句子既深度嫁咩-0-
你果D只係結構但唔錯!!!!! 我背唔到篇文...或者講我唔想背
我怕我idea出錯 ctk所言甚是
even though your idea is excellent,you may not get high level with lack of sentence pattern
或者有時候係可能用字用錯意思之類,都有可能令到個marker誤解你篇文 Even though your sentence structure is better than the design of Water Cube, you may not get high level also due to lack of designers' thought 嗯,所以評grade要互相配合,缺一不可 又要我背文?
那一個大海, 是我遙不可及的目標 冇人要你背文
只係同你講下就算真係有人咁都幫你評到grade,同出黎果個一定有落差
如果係咁 評黎做乜?? 求個安心!
人做好多non-productive things because of scare and fear = =既然係咁我試下評啦
content黎講我覺得對到題,而且夠point 3
但develop就唔多夠(我就咁睇),好多point同埋有對比
如果配合埋自然的sentence,應該有4,如果自然之餘亦有wide vocab,wide pattern 就4-5個位啦
但係我就咁睇個introduction 似乎過分用太多pattern或者搞到好奇怪